Little Scarlett 2 “Creative Writing”
Police officer: At seventeen hundred hours police stormed the property inhabited
by “the black hand gang”. The gang possessed a mini semi-automatic machine gun
and four defence grenades. The police had double this fire power possessing 7 rifles.
A battle took place in the front room of the property. Officer Brown was mugged
at 17:03 by the opposing gang member identified as Mike Rand who was an ex
armed forces member after he took several shots to the body. Officer Cofty and
Officer Jones were severely injured after being caught in the blast of one of
the grenades which also collapsed one of the walls of the property. Three of
the five gang members were shot at 17:06 which gave cover for Officer Lawson the
get behind the remaining two members of the gang. These two were arrested for possession
of dangerous weapons and drug trading. At 17:35 police forces found Scarlet and
her grandmother after a police dog picked up on a scent trail which lead to a
van where a faint metallic clanging could be heard from. Police opened the back
doors with a crowbar to discover Scarlett and her grandmother gagged and taped
to the wall. A box containing further weapons possessing harm was found which contained
a kg of ammo and a knife. Scarlet and her grandmother were released unharmed
with only a formal warning to Scarlett’s mother.
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ReplyDeleteKPI: C2c Write scripts to improve dialogue with a clear purpose A
+ You show understanding of the character speaking in the choice of language (the language used in a police report)(A bit obsessed with weaponry, though!)
T What do you want the audience to feel? How could you make them feel this more?
L Do not centre your work. It should be left or fully justified.
I want to make my audience feel a little bit scared and nervous.I could make my audience feel this more by saying that the police men lost contact and reinforcements were sent.
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